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So I got into this speaking competition, I’m into the semi-finals. It’s called The Rostrum Voice Of Youth Speaking Compeition or something. But anyway, my English teacher got me into it, and I got into the semi finals.
We have to pick a title from 6 different options, and then just write, in any way we interpret it. I picked the title ‘When in…’ And finished it as ‘When in a victims diary.’ I’ve wrote about the diary of a bully victim!
It’s a topic that means a lot to me, and I believe that we should be doing something about it!
If you guys have some spare time, could you give it a read and give me feedback?
Thank you!
– Bunnygirl
Bunnygirl –
Students like you are leading the charge to end bullying in school and that is a beautiful thing! I am an English teacher, and I can tell you that your English teacher must be VERY proud of you. I also fight against bullying everyday as an at-risk alternative education teacher.
Your entries are very compelling and give an accurate portrayal of the mental decline of a bullying victim. You have one sentence in the second entry that is a little awkward grammatically. It currently says, “There have been several people add me on Facebook, names I don’t recognise.” I think it would smooth out a bit if the entry said “There have been several people who added me on Facebook, names I don’t recognise.” (Here in the States, we spell is “recognize” but I have a feeling from some of your syntax that perhaps you live in Europe or Australia where that spelling would be accurate). Overall, that was the only thing I picked up on and I thought you did a beautiful job on this! Good luck with the rest of the competition and let us know how it works out. However, simply making it to the semi-finals sounds like a huge honor. ![]()
BonnieSue –
Thank you very much for taking the time and patience to read this through thoroughly! That alone means a lot! I have corrected the sentence, I can see why it was incorrect before, thank you for pointing that out!
Yes, I used to live in England, and we have since moved out to Australia, actually about a year and 4 months ago, so you’re correct on both accounts with the spelling! I’ll keep you posted on how it goes, I have to deliver this speech, plus a ‘short notice’ one on Saturday the 18th of May.
(Short notice speeches are where they give you a totally new topic, and you have …maybe…15 minutes to prepare a 3 minute speech. Quite scary to think about!!)
I don’t think it matters where you live, bullying is everywhere. This was a great topic, it sounds like you really care. It is important to young people to start taking a stand because they are the ones who can bring about change. Teachers and parents and whoever else can only do so much by cracking down. When I was in high school, actually even long before that, it would have made the world to me if one of my peers would have stood up for me. I bet your teacher is very proud of you bunnygirl. =)
I have several international friendships, so I often pick up on these little differences. I know an Australian horse trainer who likes to say “years of age” instead “years old” (i.e. the horse is one year of age instead of one year old). I think it sounds so much more fancy!!
I am sure you will do great at your competition!
Thank you for reading LBJ! I hope that my speech when delivered to my classmates (for ‘experience’ and ‘practice’ as my English teacher puts it!) inspires them to stick up for others!
BonnieSue, I know what you mean, everybody says different things. I’m actually into horses myself!
Can’t get enough of the Lagomorph and Equine friends!
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